Chocolate Experience Writing

We writ about feeling, seeing, smelling and tasting chocolate and then writing about it. We had different attempts doing it and keep editing till we had five attempts. Here is my 1st and 5th attempt! I enjoyed tasting this and expressing my feeling and senses about it. I learn't how to make each attempt better and take lot's of time on things!


Attempt 1: I was so excited to have chocolate. I was so excited that I started salivating. When the chocolate was handed out I felt like a true winner. When I felt It I could feel hard, solid rocks and the chocolate grease. I saw brown goo and dots with the chocolate segment. I saw square dog poop ew and carved on top the word cadbury. It smelt like oily melons and sticky water with chocolate milk and flower pollen mist. Chocolate cake with brown honey on top. When it was in my mouth I tasted gooey oil and sticky goo with sloopy water mixed with icky ice and grated on top melting cheese and believe me it was melting. It was vibrating with my lips. It was starting to crack making the taste of flower water. It was chilling me. It tasted like it was also rinsed with coffee liquid. I was feeling like it was giving me superpowers and omega ability. It was so good. I loved how it tasted and was so refreshing.\

Attempt 5:

I was so excited to have cold and tasty chocolate. I was so excited that I started salivating. When the chocolate was handed out I felt like a true winner in heaven. When I felt It I could feel hard, solid unbreakable rocks and the chocolate grease. It felt like the diamond ore. I saw chestnut goo and hazel dots with the chocolate segment. I saw square, bronze dog poop ew and carved on top the word cadbury. It smelt like oily melons and sticky water with chocolate milk and flower pollen mist. It smelt like mother nature in the neon sun. It also smelt like Chocolate cake with brown honey on top. When it was in my mouth I tasted gooey oil and sticky goo with sloopy water mixed with icky ice and grated on top melting cheese and believe me it was melting because it was so scorching hot and it had overheated because it was in there so long. It was vibrating with my ruby lips. It was starting to crack making the taste of flower water. It was chilling me. It tasted like it was also rinsed with coffee liquid. It had a real kick to it. It was so awesome. It felt like iced chocolate. I felt like I was a guardian of a superpower. I was feeling like it was giving me superpowers. I couldn’t get enough of the energy and delicious flavour. It was so spectacular. I loved how it tasted and was so refreshing. I loved it. I loved tasting chocolate because it is so good!