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Friday 18 March 2016

Awesome Autumn

We are learning to make our writing more interesting by doing multiple attempts. Here are my attempts. The adjectives are in yellow. The similes are in pink and my favourite sentence is in green. Hope you like it!

Adjectives
Similes
Favourite sentence
attempt 1
Autumn is a season.In Autumn the wind turns into a Autumn breeze as Winter starts to come closer. The leafs start to change colour because of the wind and they start to die. The water starts to have heavy waves. Lots of people get colds and go see others and they get cold colds to. The sun comes up late because we have longer nights. The butterflies fly north because it is cold. People stay inside more and wear jerseys and jackets. There starts to be Ice because it is almost Winter and Autumn is a cold season.Most animals start to hibernate.  Most people don’t do what they do in summer and spring when it is Autumn.
attempt 2
Autumn is a cold,chilling and colorful season. In Autumn the winds turns into a cold, chilling and cool Autumn breeze because every day Winter is closer. The leaves change color to orange,brown,red and gold leaves because the leaves start to die and the wind migrated from the other side of the world has came here. The water starts to glisten and glitter and turns into strong, heavy and bright blue waves which send a chill up my spine. Lots of people get sicking and unwanting colds and when they go to see others that get infected with that same cold. The bright scorching beautiful sun in the colorful and beautiful sunrise comes up later because of daylight savings making longer, Dark abyssed, black hole and cursed nights longer creating lovely,colorful and bright days shorter. The wonderful birds and beautiful butterflies migrate  port because the chilling cold weather is coming and the beautiful warm is in the northern hemisphere. lots of people stay in their warming and loved house to stay warm and wear warm jackets and overheated jerseys to stay cosy warm. There starts to be freezing, chilling, frozen and spine freezing ice starts to come because frozen winter is coming to us and Autumn is a cold season. Most amazing animals start to hibernate because the food is scarce it is very frosty and can’t handle the cold. Lots of lovely humans don’t do what wonderful and cool things they do in Summer and Spring in frosty,freezing,breezy cold Autumn!
Attempt 3
Autumn is a polar, glacial, chilling, hyperborean, inclement and kaleidoscopic season. In Autumn the winds turns into a cold, chilling and cool Autumn breeze because every day Winter is closer. The leaves change color to orange,brown,red and gold leaves because the leaves start to die and the wind migrated from the other side of the world has came here. The aquapura(water) starts to glisten and glitter and turns into strong, heavy and bright blue waves which send a chill up my spine. Lots of people get rocky(sick) and when they go to see others that get infected with that same sickness. The radiant scorching gorgeous sun in the jazzy and beautiful sunrise comes up later because of daylight savings making longer, Dark abyssed, black hole and cursed nights longer creating lovely,colorful and bright days shorter. The miraculous birds, beautiful butterflies, Colossal mammals, undersized amphibians and bloodcurdling reptiles lie torpid(migrate)port because the chilling cold weather is coming and the beautiful warm is in the northern hemisphere and it has semi occasional nourishment(food) it is very frosty and can’t handle the cold. lots of people stay in their warming and loved house to stay thermal(warm) and wear lukewarm(warm) jackets and overheated jerseys to stay cosy, cushy, intimate summery. There starts to be freezing, chilling, frozen and spine freezing ice starts to come because frozen winter is coming to us and Autumn is a cold season. Lots of lovely humans don’t do what prime and hawkish things they do in riot time/Summer and elasticity/Spring in antarctic,siberian,airflow cold autumnal equinox/Autumn!
Attempt 4
Autumn is a polar, glacial, chilling, hyperborean, inclement and kaleidoscopic season which is as cold as a frozen dog in Antarctica. In Autumn the cyclone(wind) turns into a icebox, chilling and cool Autumn tempest(wind) because every day Winter is closer. The leaves change color to orange,brown,red and gold leaves because the leaves start to perish and the whirlwind migrated from the other side of the world has came here. The aquapura(water) starts to glisten and glitter and turns into strong, heavy and luminos ultramarine waves which send a chill up my spine. Lots of people get rocky(sick) and when they go to see others that get infected with that same sickness. The radiant scorching gorgeous sun in the jazzy sunrise comes up later because of daylight savings making longer, rayless abyssed, obsidian hole and cursed nights longer creating attractive,chromatic and phosphorescent days shorter. The miraculous birds, beautiful butterflies, Colossal mammals, undersized amphibians and bloodcurdling reptiles lie torpid(migrate)port because the chilling cold weather is coming and the beautiful clement is in the northern hemisphere and it has semi occasional nourishment(food) it is very frosty and can’t handle the nippy. galores of people stay in their warming and loved house to stay thermal(warm) and wear lukewarm(warm) jackets and overheated jerseys to stay cosy, cushy, intimate summery. There starts to be freezing, chilling, frozen and spine freezing ice starts to come because frozen winter is coming to us and Autumn is a cold season. Legions of exquisite humans don’t do what prime and hawkish things they do in riot time/Summer and elasticity/Spring in antarctic,siberian,airflow cold autumnal equinox/Autumn!
Attempt 5
Autumn is a polar, glacial, chilling, season which is as cold as a as a frosty owl in the night and only gets colder. In Autumn the cyclone(wind) turns into a icebox, chilling and cool Autumn wind because every day Winter is closer. The leaves change color to amber orange also go as brown as mud, scorching flamed lava red and leaves as gold as the burning engulfed red flames because the leaves start to perish and the whirlwind has transported here from the other side of the world. The aquapura(water) starts to glisten and glitter and turns into stark, heavy and luminos ultramarine waves which send a chill up my spine. Lots of people get rocky(sick) and when they go to see others that get infected with that same sickness. The radiant scorching gorgeous sun in the jazzy and golden shine sunrise comes up later because of daylight savings making longer, rayless abyssed, obsidian hole and cursed nights longer creating attractive,chromatic and phosphorescent days shorter. Most amazing animals like the miraculous birds, beautiful butterflies, Colossal mammals, undersized amphibians and bloodcurdling reptiles lie torpid(migrate)port because the chilling cold weather is coming which is as cold as a wet half frozen frost giant and the beautiful clement is in the northern hemisphere and here it has semi occasional nourishment(food)and it is very frosty and can’t handle the nippy. galores of citizens stay in their warming and loved house to stay thermal(warm) and erosion lukewarm(warm) jackets and overheated jerseys to stay cosy, cushy, intimate summery. There starts to be freezing, chilling, frozen and spine freezing ice starts to come because frozen winter is coming to us and Autumn is a arctic interval. Legions of exquisite humans don’t do what prime and hawkish things they do in riot time/Summer and elasticity/Spring in antarctic,siberian,airflow cold autumnal equinox/Autumn!